Friday, December 7, 2007

Letter of Introduction (writ 101Portfoio) RD

All life is but a growth of the self and all writing is but the growth of the mind. Writer's reform themselves and transform their styles as life progresses, and each thought becomes a little different from the less. I am welcoming you to show my own growth in this short, fall quarter, by exemplifying my ideas towards writing and the strengths and weakness in the essays I have included in this portfolio. As my writing philosophy adapted, it has revealed both the strengths and weaknesses in my writing, allowing me to grow.


For me, in correlation to essays, my philosophy has been general and consistent throughout the years. I firmly believe that writing can often communicate what speaking and standing cannot: thought. It gives equal standing to everyone's thoughts and everyone's beliefs. In approaching academic papers, I had always begun by using the Jane Schaeffer format and loosely based, personalized derivations of it. While filling in the template, I usually just place whatever I feel would work best or flow nicely when regarding to my initial brainstorming for the prose. Upon the completion of a draft, I would then revise and edit the paper until I felt it completely prepared to turn it in. Over this time, I felt the need to ensure perfection, or near perfection, in my essays. In this manner, I attempt to adequately prepare my thoughts for anyone to view. Thus, my attitude towards writing was simplistic in the beginning.


One essay written in my Writing 101 course, "Racism in Bacon's Rebellion," was written using this philosophy. It was not until after I had given the paper to my teacher did I realize how poorly I had done. I began looking it over and finding out what exactly had happened to result in the pitiable work I had written. Soon, I realized how overwhelmed my argument was by the sheer number of information that had been used in it. Returning my attention to the outline we had been required to do for the essay, I noticed the overpowering length of information against the minute and bare argument and unfocused thesis. So, I began to re-write the paper after I had established this, reverting back to my writing philosophy in order to write a presentable piece. Yet, I still need to work on my general wordiness throughout the paper. The first of my essays was well written only after I noticed the drastic change in my philosophy.


"Federalists in New Hampshire" would be the second essay presented in this portfolio. In working with three other people, I was forced to adapt my approach to writing the paper. We brainstormed and pieced together the argument, and eventually procured the final document. Through permission to edit and revise by my group members, I was able to create a stronger voice - perchance even and overpowering one - and create a better flow for the entire piece. Unfortunately, we ultimately ran out of time for the duration of these procedures, leaving the conclusion and introduction untouched, and eliciting a choppy feel from the work in both organization and much verbosity. After re-writing it, I can only report that now it works, if still - sadly - rather wordy. Thus, this paper was able to allow me to accept new challenges and adapt my writing philosophies to meet those of my group members.


While my philosophies and approaches reverted and evolved, I have grown as a writer over this quarter. From originally defining my philosophies to writing essays, I can tell the change. My ability to attribute the strengths and shortcomings of my papers has improved as I continued to use my philosophy. I will always, though, continue to stick strongly to my beliefs.

4 comments:

Paul said...

Wow, really good. The only thing I can suggest is trying to find a different word to use instead of "everyone" in the second paragraph. Otherwise grat job. ^^

Tiffany Luu said...

Wow... haha thats all I can say...

I really liked your intro letter,
the only thing is I would like to see more of your strengths mentioned in the letter. If they were already there, then if you could elaborate a little more, that would be awesome. I just feel sometimes that discussion of your weaknesses overpowers the brief mention of strengths in your writing.

Other than that... its great. :D

Craig McKenney said...

Shelby,

I think this is a fantastic start. Think about quoting your essays to make your point.

One other thing that is a little troublesome is the first couple of lines that are somewhat "fantasy novel" in style/ voice. How might you tweak that/ simplify that to make it less obtuse/ more specific?

Overall, very well done...

Sergey Maksimenko said...

Very good essay. So far the BEST iv seen. Try to put more of your strengths in the essay. Other than that, looks good.